Granted, I will readily admit that I was being picky on some issues.
Now, I will present "What SGV should have typed":
I will readily admit that, as well as correcting blindingly obvious mistakes, I made a number of stylistic changes, which were not necessarily an improvement, and in some sentences, I retained some clauses which made entirely no sense.
The redundant third sentence especially seems, redundantly, to be a redundant product of the Department of Redundancy Department, a department I find to be completely redundant.