( to the tune of Drake's " Started From the Bottom )
http://genius.com/Drake-started-from-the-bottom-lyrics/

INTRO
Warlight....
Genghis on the track

HOOK
Started from East China, now I'm here
'Bout to beat Featherbucket, and the livestream's drinking beer.
Started from East China, now I'm here
'Bout to beat the Master, and the livestream's drinking beer.
Started from East China, now I'm here
'Bout to beat x-apex, and the livestream's drinking beer.
Started from East China, now I'm here
Just won the tournament, the whole livestream's drinking beer.

Well, I had it rough from the jump;
I didn't get my 1,2,3 so I was stuck with my 4,5,6
And I felt like I was a bum;
He got the One Turn Bonus, so yeah I was in a pretty tight fix
But I didn't give my composure up;
I kept up the fight and I made my moves right
And like Churchill I simply did not give up;
I constricted Caucasus and I broke his main income.

HOOK, but on last line...
Started from Each China, now I'm here
Only made $4, what a waste ; lookin' from the rear

Yeah, I thought about taking Japan
Somehow he got West US, the man certainly had a plan
Warlight, But I used my reinforcement card
Took him out of Brazil, used the high ground like Jabbar
Warlight, But I just want the credit where it's due;
I'mma use what I was taught, by Lawlz : hater of jew
Warlight, He tried to win the game with counter picks;
Too bad for him, because I had counter tricks

HOOK, but on last line...
Started from East China, now I'm here
Shooting down these babies as if I were hunting deer

BRIDGE x2
Defensive tactics? No man, we don't feel that.
Forget a new player, where the old pros at?
They don't like to do too much analyzin',
They've got no state of mind, they don't have zen.

ENDING
'Cuz I Started from CA ,now I'm here
Try'na take SA, and the livestream's drinking beer
Started from EA, now I'm here
Got countered by ME, the livestream's stopped drinking beer
Started from East Russia, now I'm here
Surprised my opponent, now the livestream's full of fear
Started from East China, now I'm here
'Bout to beat x-apex, the whole livestream's drinking beer.


( yeah )

Nicely done.

Record the audio, mix, master, upload.

Unless you do the above, these is just a bunch of very weak lines.

edit: I'm not writing this to diss you or start any flame war. Seriously. do it. Step a level above where you are now. Start recording. In my opinion, you're very weak SO FAR, but without actually recording and hearing it, you'll never improve, while you do have a potential and most of all the nerve and you keep consequently writing which is good. Step up and show the guys with higher expectations, that you are ready to get in the game, and that your not afraid to get vocal.

Edited 12/12/2014 10:32:56

Lol I just do this rap stuff on the side. I made this out of boredom. Appreciate the critique though.

AlterEgoist, just imagine the singer singing Genghis' lyrics. It's not that Genghis is weak, it's that you have a weak imagination.

hahahaha

No, Жұқтыру. He calls it Rap. It's not rap as long as it's only lyrics.

There's nothing wrong with my imagination.

Edited 12/12/2014 13:58:59

You have the beat and rhythm. Easy enough to visualize.

try it on rappify or songify :)

Fridge is right. If you aren't actually adding a beat, all you have is a poem. And if you're aiming to write poetry, this is not the way to do it :)

You all have the beat. He said

( to the tune of Drake's "Started From the Bottom" )

Mr. Fall and others:

take a note that THE SAME lyrics to the SAME beat can be rapped with different flow. Quoting which beat he sees in it is not enough to see if he's got it all right. It's sort of like riddims in ragga.. exactly same instrumentals, but different artists make completely different songs with it..

Picking up the mic like a shovel.
Can you dig it?

Edited 12/14/2014 15:26:53

https://www.warlight.net/forum/thread?ThreadID=3095

The thread that convinced me for months that myhand===Gui

Edward, I have to ask you to stop this trolling